Is it to be a love match or something more . . .
... mercenary.
Please do not use mercurial when you mean mercenary. Mercurial does not mean mercenary.
Mercurial — “characterized by rapid and unpredictable changeableness of mood” (Well, there is also the "thievishness" thing, but is marrying for money quite the same as being a thief?)
Mercenary — “serving merely for pay or sordid advantage; greedy”
Marrying solely for money or position is mercenary. Unless the heroine/hero is also changing their mind about it every few seconds, it is not mercurial.
As well, I would ask you not to use either "mercurial" or "mercenary" eight times in ten pages.
As a romance reader, I thank you for your consideration.
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